Philosophy Paper: I got a "C-"! HELP!

[arkmann]

^Maybe we should have you proof read our papers......

 

[yourockit]

your writing format is all over the place. I grade papers often for my classes I teach. There is no introduction conclusion. the first have of the paper is quotes, and nothing of your own. Then all your own. Spread out the material if you need to quote. Explain more, and less quoting. I am also confused by your paper. Your ideas are not clear. Did you write this in class, outside class, it seems you need to have someone proof read your paper, not for grammar as many people think, but for flow and making sense. You can read the paper and get it without thinking. In your mind you fill in or know what you mean, we do not... Hope this helps... so you know I give lower than C- for this...

Please don't take offense to this. This paper was not written for a beginning English composition class in which a very obvious introduction and conclusion should be given. The format is not the problem with this paper. There is only one sentence in it that could use rewording and that is because it expects too much from the reader.

This is a philosophy paper. There needs to be a lot of citing in order for the reader to be able to check to make sure that he is on the same page as the writer at each step of the way in the argument.

Thank you for your input, but flow, structure and making sense are not the central concerns here. This is a poor paper for a different reason. The reason is, my interpretation of the material is off.

 

[Wolf3101]

If the TONE of your paper gives off the impression that your lost then any relitive points your trying to make are likely to get lost as well. For this reason alone its wrong to say that just because this paper or any others for that mater are not bieng turned in for English composition or Creative writing that the structure and format are unimportiant. They are ALWAYS importiant. HOW you choose to get your message across is many times even MORE importiant than the point itself.

A smooth even flow of words equates to a smooth even flow of ideas...

To put it another way...when you SOUND like you know what your talking about any argument you present is taken far more seriously. This is especially true in philosophy because it represents pure thaught with NO basis at all in provable fact...

In the World of Philosophy...the most polished BS rules...

 

[oddballer]

If the TONE of your paper gives off the impression that your lost then any relitive points your trying to make are likely to get lost as well. For this reason alone its wrong to say that just because this paper or any others for that mater are not bieng turned in for English composition or Creative writing that the structure and format are unimportiant. They are ALWAYS importiant. HOW you choose to get your message across is many times even MORE importiant than the point itself.

A smooth even flow of words equates to a smooth even flow of ideas...

To put it another way...when you SOUND like you know what your talking about any argument you present is taken far more seriously. This is especially true in philosophy because it represents pure thaught with NO basis at all in provable fact...

In the World of Philosophy...the most polished BS rules...

i like that....

 

[Bderick67]

I cant even comprehend what most of that means!

"that" being MFK as a whole?