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a few years ago i worked at a motel on the "bad side" of town. i could write a book.

one day a young girl had checked in, 18 or 19 years old. early in my shift i caught her outside drinking. i told her to take it back inside the room. we knew people went there to drink or do drugs, but we tried to keep that stuff in the rooms.

later in the shift i went outside again, just taking a walk. she was outside, not drinking, but not wearing pants. i went up stairs told her to put some pants on. she tells me to go into the room with her saying things to me that I'm not sure how i would repeat without having the post deleted. she was a prostitute. like i said, she was 18, i didn't want to put her on the street. so i told her to put some pants on and i went back to the desk.

a few hours later, one of the live-ins calls me and says some crazy stuff is going on upstairs. i go outside, sure enough its her room. some new girl is banging on the door. screaming her head off. i make my way up the stairs.
me: what is going on here?
second girl: i left to buy some cigarettes and they locked me out. all my stuff is in there
me: ok. ill go in and get it. you wait here. then you can leave. what did you leave in there?
second girl: my sweater, my purse... and my crack pipe.
me: :-| ...... well if i find a crack pipe I'm calling the cops. so I'm gonna find your crack pipe, then call the cops.
i go inside. the girl from earlier in there, her john, and some second guy. i tell them what the girl said. and told them if i had to come outside one more time i was going to call the cops and have them removed from the property. i didn't bother looking for anything. when i exited the room, the second girl was gone.

maybe an hour before the end of my shift, i get another call from someone on the opposite side of the property. "hey man, some girl is getting her *** whooped in her room with the door open." sure enough it was that first girl. the second guy in the room was her pimp. beat the crap out of her. he took off in his truck before i could call the cops. she didn't want me to call the cops. she just took off into the night with a bloody face. so went back inside and continued working on homework.
 
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The exterminator went to the abandoned house, which was to be remodeled soon, he opened the door, and he looked for signs of spiders, which he got complaints about, he found no signs, but decided to spray anyway , pretty routine.

After he finished he went to his truck, starting the vehicle he headed towards home, almost there he felt a sharp stabbing pain on his ankle, he looked down and saw a 2 foot spider half under his seat.

He screamed and jumped out of the car, running away from that... that.. thing!

His truck sat in the middle of the road, door still open, the spiders sinuous shape seemed to ooze out of the vehicle, and started sprinting towards the exterminator!

The exterminators vision was blurry, he decided to run towards the nearest house.
 
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A few days later the exterminators empty truck is towed after being stopped in front of a fire hydrant to long, the exterminator's wife put out a missing persons report.



Meanwhile a spider was hungry again, it crawled out of the culvert and towards a park where it could hear children.....
 
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Here is a story I wrote for class, enjoy.

The murder of Jason

As I saw Hunter being led to the electric chair I began to remember how it had gotten to this point…

I had seen it all. I had seen the fear in Jason’s eyes as he saw the knife causing him to drop his bottle of Jack Daniels. Every scream he made while the knife tore through his flesh I heard. The look in his eyes after the knife ran through his throat silencing him forever is one that I’ll never forget. Seeing Hunter look around before picking up the bottle of Jack Daniels made my heart stop because I knew if he had seen me hiding behind this tree I would die. The Jack Daniels he had just drank cleared the mist swirling around in his head that had plagued his mind for the past 5 days since he had had his last drink. Once the mist was gone he looked down at the body and went quiet for a moment then dropped to his knees and started bawling. He pulled the knife out of Jason’s neck and held him closely. While he was sobbing I ran hoping he would be too busy to notice me. I tore my t shirt while trying to get away but as I looked back I realized with a sigh of relief that he wasn’t following me. I kept on running until I had gotten to my house and was sure he wasn’t following me then called the cops. I told the woman on the line that I had just witnessed a murder. She asked me to repeat parts because she couldn’t hear over noises in the background. After they had arrested Hunter they asked me to come in to give an official statement. I was in the room playing on my phone when the police officer came in so I put my phone back in the pocket on my dress shirt and began to tell him the story.

I had walked to the local convenience store and bought a Dr.Pepper and gotten my receipt which said I had been there as 11:35 pm. As I walked out I heard the owner mumbling about batteries which I ignored. Just as I was about to go out I bumped into someone who angrily said “Watch it dumbass”. As I regained my composure I looked up at the person who I had bumped into. The man was Jason Smith, a 6’8” man who once ran a successful company which pulled in more than a million dollars a year. Going off of his clothing you wouldn’t think so since consisted of a hoodie and jeans which both had multiple holes in them. The life he once had was stolen from him by his brother Hunter Smith. Hunter smith is 7’3” at 345 pounds with most of it being muscle that he had maintained from the days he had been a marine. He had been dishonorably discharged after a heavy night of drinking which ended with him almost killing his superior after an argument. Everything went downhill for Hunter after that. He became a hardcore alcoholic and whenever he didn’t have money for more alcohol he would first beg the store owner to give him the alcohol and put it on his tab and when that didn’t work he would break into houses, beat people, and steal whatever money and alcohol he could find to get his fix again. Once Hunter was discharged from the marines his brother Jason took him in, that’s when Hunter slowly turned him into an alcoholic as well. There was an unspoken rule between them that they wouldn’t take the others alcohol. Jason had plenty of money left over from his business days while Hunter was always broke and was constantly out of alcohol. The longer Hunter was between drinks the more violent and desperate and his mind would be clouded with mist more each passing hour until he wouldn’t remember a thing during these periods. It all went along smoothly until one day Hunter had been without a drop of alcohol in 3 days and Jason knew it. He began to worry that Hunter would do something so he hid his alcohol. When he got home Hunter jumped him at gun point and threatened to kill him unless he gave him his alcohol. Jason gave him what he wanted then ran out and called the cops who arrested Hunter. After that point he tried to avoid Hunter the best he could.

Anyway back to the main story.

I knew Jason was going to buy his normal bottle of Jack Daniels then drink himself to sleep and at this point he was getting his receipt and was about to leave when I saw Hunter. I warned him and he bolted out of the store into the woods nearby hoping he would not be followed by his alcohol depraved brother. As I took a step forward I heard something crunch under my foot so I looked at what it was. It was Jason’s receipt that read “11:05 pm, 1 bottle of Jack Daniels”. I ignored it and went outside to see what was happening. I laughed as I saw Jason stumble as he was trying to run into the woods and the Hunter trying to catch up to him. Based off of his alcohol deprived state I guessed it would take him 30 minutes to catch up to his younger brother. Knowing how violent Hunter would be when he found Jason, desperate to get his fix I figured this would be the best time to stop it so I followed Jason.

That was several weeks ago and now I’m in the audience watching Hunters body shake as several thousand volts of electricity pass through his body. As I see his body stop shaking I knew 2 things. I knew I had gotten away with murder and I knew my blood lust was starting up again…..


If you don't understand then go back over and look for the small clues I left.
 
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Here is a story I wrote for class, enjoy.

The murder of Jason

As I saw Hunter being led to the electric chair I began to remember how it had gotten to this point…

I had seen it all. I had seen the fear in Jason’s eyes as he saw the knife causing him to drop his bottle of Jack Daniels. Every scream he made while the knife tore through his flesh I heard. The look in his eyes after the knife ran through his throat silencing him forever is one that I’ll never forget. Seeing Hunter look around before picking up the bottle of Jack Daniels made my heart stop because I knew if he had seen me hiding behind this tree I would die. The Jack Daniels he had just drank cleared the mist swirling around in his head that had plagued his mind for the past 5 days since he had had his last drink. Once the mist was gone he looked down at the body and went quiet for a moment then dropped to his knees and started bawling. He pulled the knife out of Jason’s neck and held him closely. While he was sobbing I ran hoping he would be too busy to notice me. I tore my t shirt while trying to get away but as I looked back I realized with a sigh of relief that he wasn’t following me. I kept on running until I had gotten to my house and was sure he wasn’t following me then called the cops. I told the woman on the line that I had just witnessed a murder. She asked me to repeat parts because she couldn’t hear over noises in the background. After they had arrested Hunter they asked me to come in to give an official statement. I was in the room playing on my phone when the police officer came in so I put my phone back in the pocket on my dress shirt and began to tell him the story.

I had walked to the local convenience store and bought a Dr.Pepper and gotten my receipt which said I had been there as 11:35 pm. As I walked out I heard the owner mumbling about batteries which I ignored. Just as I was about to go out I bumped into someone who angrily said “Watch it dumbass”. As I regained my composure I looked up at the person who I had bumped into. The man was Jason Smith, a 6’8” man who once ran a successful company which pulled in more than a million dollars a year. Going off of his clothing you wouldn’t think so since consisted of a hoodie and jeans which both had multiple holes in them. The life he once had was stolen from him by his brother Hunter Smith. Hunter smith is 7’3” at 345 pounds with most of it being muscle that he had maintained from the days he had been a marine. He had been dishonorably discharged after a heavy night of drinking which ended with him almost killing his superior after an argument. Everything went downhill for Hunter after that. He became a hardcore alcoholic and whenever he didn’t have money for more alcohol he would first beg the store owner to give him the alcohol and put it on his tab and when that didn’t work he would break into houses, beat people, and steal whatever money and alcohol he could find to get his fix again. Once Hunter was discharged from the marines his brother Jason took him in, that’s when Hunter slowly turned him into an alcoholic as well. There was an unspoken rule between them that they wouldn’t take the others alcohol. Jason had plenty of money left over from his business days while Hunter was always broke and was constantly out of alcohol. The longer Hunter was between drinks the more violent and desperate and his mind would be clouded with mist more each passing hour until he wouldn’t remember a thing during these periods. It all went along smoothly until one day Hunter had been without a drop of alcohol in 3 days and Jason knew it. He began to worry that Hunter would do something so he hid his alcohol. When he got home Hunter jumped him at gun point and threatened to kill him unless he gave him his alcohol. Jason gave him what he wanted then ran out and called the cops who arrested Hunter. After that point he tried to avoid Hunter the best he could.

Anyway back to the main story.

I knew Jason was going to buy his normal bottle of Jack Daniels then drink himself to sleep and at this point he was getting his receipt and was about to leave when I saw Hunter. I warned him and he bolted out of the store into the woods nearby hoping he would not be followed by his alcohol depraved brother. As I took a step forward I heard something crunch under my foot so I looked at what it was. It was Jason’s receipt that read “11:05 pm, 1 bottle of Jack Daniels”. I ignored it and went outside to see what was happening. I laughed as I saw Jason stumble as he was trying to run into the woods and the Hunter trying to catch up to him. Based off of his alcohol deprived state I guessed it would take him 30 minutes to catch up to his younger brother. Knowing how violent Hunter would be when he found Jason, desperate to get his fix I figured this would be the best time to stop it so I followed Jason.

That was several weeks ago and now I’m in the audience watching Hunters body shake as several thousand volts of electricity pass through his body. As I see his body stop shaking I knew 2 things. I knew I had gotten away with murder and I knew my blood lust was starting up again…..


If you don't understand then go back over and look for the small clues I left.
Very good, disturbing with a twist
 
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Tell me all of the clues you found and then I’ll tell you all of the clues and things I left.
 
Time on receipts, the fact the main character was playing games on his phone after "witnessing" a Violent murder.

Any others?
 
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